Contrast and Compare
Just a few decades ago an activity was created involving the throwing of a disc by a bunch of hippie college kids. Today this activity is a game of intense endurance, jumping, diving and strategy that is played at highly competitive levels by clubs, high schools, and colleges around the nation. This sport is known as ultimate Frisbee and has gained a national organization (USA ultimate). Ultimate Frisbee should be accepted as a NCAA sport.
Question
Can you run and sprint non stop for at least a hour, flick a Frisbee 70 yards, or catch a disc while diving through air. You probably can if you play the sport of ultimate. This goes to show that it is a sport of skill that only a handful of people can do so why isn't it recognised as a professional sport let alone part of the NCAA. Ultimate Frisbee should be accepted as a NCAA sport.
Descriptive
It’s 90 degrees out and there are a couple of teens running around on a field throwing around some white colored disc. Sweat is dripping from the faces of these kids as they run to cover someone, to get open, or rapidly move side to side to block the release of the disc. This scenery is the act of playing a sport known as ultimate Frisbee. Ultimate Frisbee should be accepted as a NCAA sport.
-wolfpack (sammy)
I like the first one, at has a very strong beginning
ReplyDelete--PB samurai
I loved the questions lead because it really shows how athletic the athletes are of the sport that many would not even consider a sport.
ReplyDeleteby: chopsticks freak
The first one was pretty bold. I liked it. - Ivan X. Naranjo
ReplyDeleteI liked the contrast and compare. It shows some background information in the beginning. It also shows what the sport requires from a physical standpoint which ties in with you thesis. \
ReplyDelete-Nepali Boy
I think that your best lead is the first one, and the second one would work also.
ReplyDelete--SUSHI MASTA
The first lead is probably the most persuasive. There are a few missing commas and comma splices that you might need to add after every introductory clause, but other than that, I think that the first lead is the most interesting and descriptive.
ReplyDelete-Lily
I like the Compare and Contrast lead the best because it gives interesting background on the sport. That being said, the other two leads demonstrate the physical exertion involved in the sport and help support you thesis. Maybe you could incorporate those elements into lead 1?
ReplyDelete-Culinary Queen
I liked lead 1 because it was very descriptive. It is also very simple and clean. But,there appears to be several grammar mistakes. Like the changing of capitalization of "Ultimate", also, you appear to be missing some commas.
ReplyDelete-Chocolate Rabbit