1) You have prepared for hours on end for this tournament, put thousands of dollars into the preparation. You do everything right you get a good night’s sleep, eat a good breakfast and head out to the field for the tourney. Once the game starts you sprint to your bunker and get striped by a stream of paintballs that just happened to be right where you were running. There was no skill involved, just a lucky guess on where you were going. Anyone can pull a trigger a few times a second and admire a pretty stream of colors coming from the barrel of his marker, ramping does not equal skill.
2) What would happen if the NFL and CFL merged, would you have three or four downs? Measure in yards or meters? Pay in Canadian or American dollars? These questions illustrate that these leagues play the same sport at its core, but also they have fundamental differences within the rules of their own league. This is what would happen if we tried to merge the PSP and NPPL leagues of paintball, true comopromise is when both parties leave equally dissatisfied.
3) If you’re one of the 15 million paintball players that have experienced a PSP type event and an NPPL type event, you know they are fundamentally different. Which is why they should not form one massive super-league.
---PB SAMURAI
i like your second one because it does a great job of comparing both paintball and American mainstream sports, so that people can understand better
ReplyDeleteThe second one was good as it compared football and paintball and Canadian football and American football. - Ivan X. Naranjo
ReplyDeleteI liked the first one because the anecdote really makes you feel what's going on in the players mind and can really feel what is happening.
ReplyDeleteBy Chopsticks freak
I like the second one because it compares your sport, with a more popular some, which will attract more readers.
ReplyDelete-Nepali Boy
I like the first lead because it is extremely detailed and it puts the reader into a play by play situation. The simple sentence structure and short words are kinda like actions themselves.
ReplyDelete-Chocolate Rabbit
Lead 2 is definitely the best because it shows what would happen if the two paintball leagues merged. Also, please label what lead types they are.
ReplyDelete-Culinary Queen
The second post connects paintball to a more widely-known sport and emphasizes that they are very similar. In this way, you have interested both paintball players and football players in reading your article. (You also might want to label which type of lead each of your leads is)
ReplyDelete-Lily
I like the second one the best, a little cliche but it works really well. In all three leads, avoid using second person.
ReplyDelete--SUSHI MASTA