Friday, November 18, 2011

Lead and nutgraph for feature story

     Sweat dangles from D-wang’s nose and splatters onto the small plastic ball below him, which he holds so elegantly with two fingers. As he drops the ball to the table beneath him, his arm with paddle in hand, swings forward ever so smoothly like a torpedo through water. At the sound of his paddle smacking the ball, it is only fractions of a second before the ball is makes its way at him again and again, until this plastic ball meets the net. With each attack on the ball, heat builds within the air as well as on his paddle and will not cool until, the match is settled. It’s hard to believe that so much intensity and extreme focus all happens on a tiny 45 square foot ping pong table, but those 45 square feet of space is where D-wang is at his best.
    D-wang also known as Daniel Wang, is what LASA has best to offer when it comes to the sport of ping pong. Being the best Ping pong player at his high school, it’s know wonder why Daniel is looked up to by freshmen that are newly interested in the sport. With such a title, he still flies humble and is always willing to give advice/help, whether it be ping pong related or schoolwork.

5 comments:

  1. nice job. the lead was capturing. very attention grabing.

    ~DaPurpleNinja

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  2. Maybe a little too descriptive... other wise quite good.

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  3. This lead was very descriptive, and you an easily imagine this scene in your mind, but maybe you shouldn't use "D-wang" too much, using a pronoun here and there is fine.

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  4. It's great! There are a few typos though... reread it and edit.-Haley

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  5. It was very dramatic and awesome, but including the sweat of the nose is very distracting

    By chopsticks freak

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