“Get up, move up!” Eddie is screaming at his teammates, shooting projectiles filled with a colorful gel moving at around 150 mph. His gun shooting in almost the exact same spot every time, he pins his opponents down and moves up the field, crawling on his stomach. “Hey Blake watch back left” as paint splatters off of the front of his bunker. His teammate pops up and headshots the newbie who had a bead on Eddie. “Flag clear, flag clear?” he yells across the field. That same teammate replies a resound yes and Eddie takes off at a dead sprint towards the flag he slides on his chest to avoid paint being shot at him and yanks the flag down ending the game and winning the round for his team.
This interview is with a serious paintball player with his own equipment and high level paintball experience. He has some advice for newer players and would like to share it with you. He is very knowledgeable and passionate about this sport. So if you want to get into paintball read on….
too sudden change to what this is about it kinda makes the reader confused.
ReplyDeleteDO NOT say "this interview is about..." instead, lead into the topic in a more subtle, graceful way. Also, don't encourage the people to "read on", if they are interested, they will do so anyway. Overall, the lead is good, but the nut graph needs work.
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